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Atnas the bad, mysterious, sly
Travels the world on his sleigh in the sky.
Santa's old friend, now inglorious foe,
This age old story is something to know:
They started out well, as partners in crime
Until one Christmas when Atnas got time.

Santa and Atnas were felons you see,
They robbed, plundered, stole - things so dastardly.
The plans were devised and thought out by Old Nick
As getaway driver he drove oh so quick.
The strong and fit Atnas brought life to the schemes,
And there was the set up of our daring team.

Their usual targets were the rich, banks and stores,
"We have little money, you won't miss some of yours"
This was the thought behind Santa's bad ways
(And he says he'll regret for the rest of his days).
Atnas was greedy, unbelievably so!
He suggested stealing from children, but Santa said no.

They argued and argued 'til blue in the face
Santa shot off enraged but Atnas gave chase
They flew round the world at neck breaking speed
Shouting and bawling but neither'd concede
Then Santa hatched a magnificent plan
To go straight and get rid of this odious man.

He stopped in his tracks and pretended to think
And then said "I've got it!" with a grin and a wink
"We'll go to each house with a naughty young child
And steal all their presents!" Atnas then smiled.
The two men shook hands and began to prepare
Then Santa snuck out with such silence and care.

He went to the lawmen and confessed their tale
They agreed that Atnas needed putting in jail.
They discussed the details for the next night
With Santa relieved he was at last doing right.
He crept back home so as not to upset
Atnas' deep sleep and then started to fret.

When the next day arrived Santa felt really quite ill
But the plan all went well, they caught Atnas with skill.
They turned to Santa, increasingly nervous,
And said for his help he got community service.
Every year at Christmas instead of stealing from kids
He had to give them all gifts – if they'd been good that is.

Santa was calmed, he liked that idea
Then swiftly recruited his trademark reindeer
And so that's how Santa first got his commission
But alas! This summer Atnas escaped from his prison,
So you'd better be good because if not its doubtless
That you'll get a visit from Santa's foe Atnas!
A little bit of fun for #TheWritersMeow's Christmas contest!

Santa used to be a criminal with his friend Atnas, but eventually he decided to do the right thing and turn him in!

Was tempted to put 'idealogically sensitive' because Santa's a good guy really and any suggestion otherwise feels like a bad thing.

It was a lot of fun to write (even if it isn't the best piece of lit in the world) and I hope you get a smile out of reading it :love:

Merry Christmas, everyone! :holly:
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Santa versus Atnas by =squeezelouise is a fun and interesting take on Santa Claus. ( Featured by thorns )
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KLEWART Featured By Owner Dec 23, 2012
This is Cleverly , Incredibly Creative ... Even down to the names ..that fact that Atnas is Santa Spelled backwards give it a simple but enchanting creativity lol i really like this short story of how Santa came to be lol ..Thanks for sharing such awesome work
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squeezelouise Featured By Owner Dec 23, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Yay! I'm so glad you like it :la: Thank you for the wonderful comment too! Its always really great to hear what people think :huggle:
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LadyofGaerdon Featured By Owner Dec 12, 2012  Professional Writer
:wave: Hi! Your piece has been featured as inspiration in #Lit-Visual-Alliance's Winter Alliance Contest article! Please :+fav: the article to bring more attention to the features and the contest. Thanks! :)
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Blacksand459 Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Excellent poem!!! Very creative...who would of thought of Santa's name backwards...being the name of his arch nemesis. hahaha.

Lovely flow to it as well. I read some of the comments, and I know how sometimes a poem just flows like water. I haven't seen your work before this, but I'll keep an eye out for you now. B-)

Congrats on a well-deserved DD, Louise!!!! :D
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squeezelouise Featured By Owner Dec 12, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you! Haha, it was just meant to be like a parallel - similar but bad so it seemed right.

Aww, that's so kind! Usually I have to put in a lot of effort to write things, but on this it really did just flow. I think you can tell when you read it back. :) And oof, thank you! I tend to fly under the radar a lot but I'm flattered you'll be keeping a look-out :love:

Thank you!!
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Zerlanar Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012  Student Artist
Very creative. I really like it.
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squeezelouise Featured By Owner Dec 12, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks! :D
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ProofrockPilchard Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012
This is brilliant, my friend! Thank you for making me laugh. :lmao:
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squeezelouise Featured By Owner Dec 12, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Yay! You are more than welcome :heart: Thank you for reading and taking the time to comment <3
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ProofrockPilchard Featured By Owner Dec 13, 2012
The pleasure is mine. :)
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Alyssa-Lioness Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012
Why do I feel like this would make a fantastic picture book?
BECAUSE IT WOULD. :love:
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ProofrockPilchard Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012
You are only too right. :D
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squeezelouise Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
:la: hehe I agree! Maybe I'll work on it! :D
Thank you for taking the time to read this! The comment and support is really appreciated. Thank you! <333
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WorldwideImage Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
fantastic holiday piece of lit! It has great rhyme and rhythm! :D hope you win the contest!
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squeezelouise Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you! I'm really glad you liked it :D I was really proud of it and still am!
The contest was actually last year, and I got tried prize, I think :) thank you for your support and wishes though - it means a loyalty to me <333
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WorldwideImage Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Congratulations for third prize!! :D
I love reading/writing poetry and works like this are great for this time of year. You deserve to be proud of it!

May you have a wonderful season and get what your heart desires most! <33
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squeezelouise Featured By Owner Dec 12, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks! :blush:

Aww, you too!!
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EmmyIsAZebra Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
GNEEEEE CONGRATS SQUEEZE! You wonderful person you.
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squeezelouise Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank youuuuuu! I'm so shocked lol. I can't believe how many hits this has got!!! I'm reaching people, Emmy! :la: I'm making them smile! Thorns set it all up! Im so happy :D
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EmmyIsAZebra Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
It's because it's awesome. I'm so glad this one got featured. It's such a fun read for the holidays! GNEEE! YOU ARE!
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squeezelouise Featured By Owner Jan 17, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
<3333333333333
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Enigma1315 Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Wow, that's good. It give me a whole new perspective on the holidays.
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squeezelouise Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Haha well even bad guys can sometimes turn into the best ones ;) I'm glad you liked it - thanks for your comment!
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Enigma1315 Featured By Owner Dec 12, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
That is true. And you're welcome.
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squeezelouise Featured By Owner Dec 13, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
<33
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naladraws Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I love it! It's really great, and will be featured in the winter features in my group :D
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squeezelouise Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Yay! Thank you, that's very kind of you! <333
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IAmTheEvy Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
This is brilliant! Sheer brilliance!! XD
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squeezelouise Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
:blush: I am not worthy!
Thank you so much <333 I'm really glad you like it! And thank you for taking the tines to read it and comment :huggle:
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IAmTheEvy Featured By Owner Dec 13, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
You should publish it in a book or something. :P
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squeezelouise Featured By Owner Dec 13, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Haha! Maybe one day! :)
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Neutral-Death Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:iconheavyplz: Very good! Very, very good!
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squeezelouise Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Haha thank you so much! I'm really glad you like it :D
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Neutral-Death Featured By Owner Dec 12, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:iconemptyspaceplz::iconyourewelcomeplz:
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Deranged-Dragon Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012
Ahh, great! I am glad this got a DD or I never would have read it. :)
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squeezelouise Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you! I'm so grateful to ^thorns for featuring me... there are a great many people who wouldn't have come across it otherwise I think! :giggle:
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Deranged-Dragon Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012
Wow, that is big. Thorns has a good amount of followers so your bound to get more attention. Anyway, keep up the good word. :clap:
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squeezelouise Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Haha yeah I swear it's like the most hits I've had on anything ever and I'm a bit giddy over it all!
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Deranged-Dragon Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012
work* instead of word. Its a shame you can't edit.
Heh, getting 20 views in one day is a big deal to me. XD
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squeezelouise Featured By Owner Dec 12, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Lolol, me too! I'm totally bowled over by it all. :faint:
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JaceDeVir Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
This is awesome
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squeezelouise Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you! I'm glad you like it! :la: :huggle:
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PhunPhishTiger Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I've gotta say, this is really quite brilliant. :XD: Keep it up!
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squeezelouise Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
:la: thank you so much! Haha brilliant is too strong a word I think, but I will definitely try to write some more :) thank you for taking the time to read it! :D
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PhunPhishTiger Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Hah, you're welcome!
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shinylugiagirl Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I love it!! :D
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squeezelouise Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you! Glad you do <333
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shinylugiagirl Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
You're welcome =)
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volotation Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012  Student General Artist
c'est bien
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volotation Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012  Student General Artist
c'est bien
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